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Tuesday 4 August 2020

200 word challenge

It was the first day of school and me and my friends went to go sit in the auditorium and eat but as we were entering we saw the new kid up on the stage playing the piano the song he was playing was amazing so we sat down and listened to him and he would just keep playing it was awesome . We could have stayed there for hours listening to him that was how good he was we were pretty sure he didn't know we were listening to him so we started to clap, he turned around and saw us he got a fright We told him that he was really good but then the bell rang and he ran out of the room.
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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous6 August 2020 at 09:05

    Hi Tai
    I think this story is really creative but next time you should add the video or picture you were writing about.

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  2. Anonymous6 August 2020 at 09:12

    Hello Tai, This is a great Story and I like the way you have made it about a new kid playing the piano. Maybe next time you could add more punctuation, there are some commas missing, or even some full stops.

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