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Monday 11 November 2019

Denny and Todd.

It was Denny's first day at  his new school, he just parked his new car in the far car park, when he got to class the school bully Todd goes of at Denny and tried to pick a fight about it, from then on Todd hated Denny. Denny makes a new friend group and of course its Todd's group of friends and Todd hates it. Also Denny starts to get close with the girl Todd likes and Todd hates it so he becomes jealous and hates Denny even more.
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  1. Anonymous18 November 2019 at 09:20

    Good job Tai. You have done really well on this post. There is one or two spelling mistakes. If I wasn't in your group I wouldn't know what you were talking about because there is no introduction. But apart form that everything that is their has happened in the story so far. Good Job

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  2. Anonymous18 November 2019 at 09:26

    Hi Tai

    I like how you have added lots of information about Denny's new school but I think that you should tell us about his sisters his hobby's and put your writing into paragraphs. But other than that I think this post is good.

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